Technical specifications
Length: 30 meters
Height/depth: 15 meters
Maximum speed (atmosphere): 1200 km/h
Engine unit(s): Based off a
Hyperdrive rating: Class 2.0
Armament: Laser cannon (1)
Crew: 1
Minimum Crew: 1
Passengers: 1
Cargo capacity: 0 metric tons
Consumables: 4 months
Other systems: Stealth System
Appearance:
Nord's appearance is mostly concealed in the black forbidding cloak he wears, but what is known of his appearance is that he is a very tall standing at almost 6ft 8. Its also apparent that he is very broad. But what lay underneath his hood is shall we say, 'less' then attractive. His face has a pink tinge in his skin and a scarred and wrinkled face, he is blind in one eye which is obvious due to its milky appearance the other pupil is a bright yellow maybe due to his Darkside corruption. His nose and ears are average size but his jaw seems to be too small in comparison to the rest of his features. His thin pale lips always wear the look of neutrality maybe being one of the only parts of this man which hasnt been deformed in some way.
Personality:
Nord's personality is very Neutral, its obvious when he is angry due to the tone in his voice but he always carries the same dreary deep tone. He is not known to get angry making a quote which is his most notable due to his mute behaviour"There are many forms of the darkside and it doesn't have to be anger. Anger.. That leads to a lack of thinking. Lack of thinking leads to death". He is very patient and willing to wait years for things to happen unlike some of the other Sith, he is quick to comment about how patients will come victory.
Force Abilities:
He wields hundreds if not thousands of techniques of the Darkside, but the most common powers he uses are Lightning, and Curse.
History:
In a dark room on Coruscant several jedi are sat around a holonet muttering nervously between themselves until a shiny silver robot comes walking slowly into the centre of the small crowded room. It opens its metal mouth slowly and says slowly "Subject three thousand two hundred and one" the voice echoes around the room and the Jedi all become silent watching the holonet. "Subject's name. Darth Damnuctor." slowly the robot takes a small cube like object and pushes it into the open slot at the side of the sphere like machine. Slowly the image of Nord appeared on the screen the jedi started to whisper far more seriously then they did before. The droid emotionlessly starts to say "Last seen on Dantooine, the accused murdered eight jedi before escaping in his ship, surely a blow to the order." looking around he stands still after a moment to see an old man stand up.
"CD-54, can you tell us please the known history on this male" he speaks with a air of authority surrounding him the jedi look at him before they all silence again. The droid nods and starts to speak again. "The accused was first seen on Corellia over twenty five years ago where several jedi apprehended him from making a deal with a Nemodian, after a long and drawn out saber fight it looked like the sith was going to win until a jedi master defeated him in lightsaber combat. This was known to radically change his strategy for the next time we saw him he used the defensive lightsaber stance compared to his aggressive stance” the jedi murmmer between themselves as the old man asks again looking sad as he asked. “Very well, now.. Tell me what you know on the male known as Nord Mirniman?” The robot starts to search its database and the old man sat down groaning slightly.
“Nord Mirniman, Born on Corellia an unknown amount of years ago brought into the Jedi Order over 40 years ago at the age of 5, the order found a strong force connection with the young male taking him from his foster home to study the ways of the force.” The robot looks at the old man who inquired as the old man asks quietly “Is that all the records show robot?” Standing still with his stare the robot answers “No. There is more but it is restricted information. Class one. But what we do know is that for some reason he left the academy at the age of twelve.” The robot was dismissed by the old man as the crowd of jedi stayed silent watching him carefully. “My old apprentice, he left thinking that there was more to learn out in the galaxy.. We found him on his home planet where we tried to bring him back, we failed and lost a lot of good men.. Then the last time we saw him his skills had improved a hundred fold and more..” his voice starts to fade not wanting to continue.. The jedi sat silently for a moment before the holonet turned off and the room turned to darkness.
First of all, thank you for the time and effort you have put into your application, I appreciate it. Second of all, I unfortunately have multiple issues with it. Please feel free to argue any of the points I am about to make.
1. Here at SWE we already have a "Sith Lord" so I am unsure how your character will fit in. If you decide to stay and make the changes I request then perhaps both yourself and Venom can come to some sort of RP agreement, but that is not up to me, and I won't be tolerating multiple Dark Lords of the Sith running around causing havoc.
1.B. It appears to me from reading your application that your character is based in the KOTOR era. The vast majority of the characters here are based ABY, and although the timeline is "open" at the moment, myself and the other members are currently discussing introducing a timeline (discussion located in the OOC forum if you would like to take a look). Although it has not yet been fully decided it will more than likely be placed After the Battle of Yavin. I am assuming that your character can easily be changed to fit this, and acknowledge fully that this is not your problem, we can certainly work something out in this regard.
2. I need more detail. What sort of hybrid is he? This is quite important. Why is he ageless when the council were informed he left the Academy at the age of 12? Surely they're smart enough to work that one out. And come to think of it, why would a 12 year old feel the need to learn more about the galaxy? How would he have the sufficient knowledge or capability to turn so much to the darkside? How could one so young kill fully grown, fully trained Jedi? It doesn't make a whole lot of sense to me. The ship's specifications are fine and I assume it was manufactured pre-KOTOR, or around that era, to explain why it was manufactured solely by the Sith and for the Sith. Feel free to correct me on this matter.
2.B. The history is merely a RP sample. I understand and appreciate your need to create somewhat of an "air of mystery" around your character, but the application suffers as a result. It is difficult creating a character such as your's, and even more so to create an original one. Can you possibly write a character history in third person, explaining exactly how your character came to be, why he would leave the Academy at the age of 12 and what exactly he has been up to since. By all means keep the RP sample as an introduction if you wish, as I feel it would work rather well as a build-up.
This is a lot, I know, and I apologise if I am coming across as brutal. Unfortunately my concerns are legitimate ones, and I personally don't know of, nor have RPed on, any site that would take this application solely on face value. I am sure there are other Star Wars RP sites that would welcome it with open arms, sites dedicated specifically to Force User characters; Sith, Dark Jedi, etc. Perhaps one of these would be better suited to Darth Damnuctor, because I do not believe I can accept this application if the changes are not made. _________________
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