Posted: Sat Jul 19, 2008 4:05 pm Post subject: Beruk Naja
Thank you, and you're right, your suggestion makes it much more believable, I’ll edit it at once, I’ll probably change other things in the Items category as well, once again thank you.
The Basics
Name: Beruk Naja
Nickname: Naja
Alias: Kunin
Home world: Tatooine
Looks
Age: 23
Gender: Male
Species: Human
Eyes colour: Green
Hair colour: Dark/Black
Facial features: Two day shave.
Skin tone: Light
Height: 1,80 meters.
Weight: Around 82 kg.
Build: Athletic, his body his slightly muscular..
Tattoos: None.
Body art: None.
Scars: Has a big scar on his right temporal lobe.
Piercings: None.
Appearance: A human with 1.80 centimetres in height and a weight of about 82 kg, with short dark hair and green eyes, keeps his body and mind in shape, usually seen in his black body armour, although when not in combat he prefers to use plain black robes to conceal his weapons and body armour.
Clothes: When not in combat or on a special assignment tries to not draw attention to himself by wearing black plain robes with a regular hood, nothing fancy but practical in order to conceal his weapons and black body armour, he stole his black robe long ago for the fun of it but ended up wearing them for their good use, the black body armour was given to him for the successful completion of an extremely difficult assignment as a reward.
Personal Details
Personality: Naja has very little remorse, rarely respects any rules or orders expect the ones given by people he respects or fears, has his own set of rules and usually does what he thinks it’s right at that moment, usually seen as a cold and harsh sentient, has the ability to reason his every action to suit his own agenda.
When in combat becomes very focused in the task at hand, does everything he can to fulfil his objectives, doesn’t usually like to work with other sentients, specially ones that he isn’t familiar with as he has trust issues, however when he trusts or likes someone he’s completely loyal to them and usually changes his demeanour towards them something that usually takes them by surprise.
Force Sensitive: Yes.
Alliance: None
Guild/Group: None.
Rank: None
Strengths: Very stealthy and intelligent, has good fighter piloting skills and is quite good with melee weapons.
Weakness/Flaws: Has a hard time in emoting and relating to unknown sentients.
Other Information:
Languages: Basic and Huttese.
History:
Beruk was born on Tatooine in Mos Eisley, his parents were regular people just trying to survive in that harsh environment, his father Lucious Naja was a freighter pilot known for his piloting skills, his mother Monica took care of him and their home, his first few years of life were happy but at age 5 his father lost his permit to fly for not complying to the local crime lord request, after that Lucious began to drink heavily and changed dramatically from a loving parent to an abusing one.
From that time on Beruk and his mother were severely beaten and humiliated in a daily basis, he lost all faith and respect he had for his father but remained there for the sake of his mother, however at 13 years of age he couldn’t stand it anymore and ran away from home and began living in the streets of Mos Eisley.
That was a dark and difficult time for him, he had to steal in order to survive, he began stealing from local merchants, mostly food or any other essentials, eventually he joined a group of other kids in the same situation as him, and until he turned 16 he stayed with them, at that time he was already very able in the art of concealing himself in order to steal any item he saw necessary.
As he turned 16 he got an invitation of the local crime lord, Karnak the Hutt, the same one who had disgraced his father and his own life for that matter, at that time he was trained by bounty hunters and assassins working for Karnak, he was an amazing student of the deadly arts, showing great cunning and at a young age began his work as an assassin for Karnak, quickly becoming his most prized and skilled employee. During these times he met a Jedi who was passing by the planet that told him that he was a Force-Sensitive, but with his age he wasn’t able to take him under his wing, Beruk was quite distraught by this news, as a young boy his mother would talk about Jedi’s, their skills and powers and tales about them, those were the best times he spent with her, and he thought about it a lot ever since he ran away.
At that time he was starting to be more and more involved in extremely difficult assignments given by Karnak, he nearly lost his life in a couple of those missions, Karnak being aware of Naja desires to be a Force-User decided to incentive his prized assassin with a Lightsaber and other equipment to better aid him in his dangerous missions, mainly body armour and other accessories, Beruk was delighted by this gift and grew more in skill, he did try to train alone with his new found weapon, but had a hard time with it, so he decided to keep it but use a Vibroblade instead as it was something that he was accustomed with.
Once he turned 21 he began disliking his boss, as he began asking too much for very little, but still he remained at his side, at that time he decided to see his mother has he hadn’t seen her for 8 years, he went back home only to find his father passed out on the living room in the morning, he began searching for his mother and when he didn’t find her he decided to wake up Lucious, his father still drunk confessed that he had killed her 2 years ago when she talked lovingly about Beruk, at that time instead of loosing it he looked at his father and at his surroundings as if assessing the situation with a cold and empty look in his eyes, that was said to be one of the most horrific and sadistic murders in Mos Eisley. Karnak the Hutt disliked this incident since it would certainly draw attention to them and ordered that Beruk was to be put down, knowing this the last Naja sought to end the persecution and killed his former employer in his sleep.
Now that he stolen a ship of his former boss, he is searching for someone to teach him the ways of the Force, will he join the Light or the Dark side of the Force?
Items
Force Powers:
None.
Weapons of choice: Vibroblade and a ELG-3A.
Items:
Single hilt, blue crystal Lightsaber.
Black body armour.
Black plain hooded robes.
Ship: T-Wing, an highly agile and manoeuvrable fighter.
Vehicle: None owned so far.
Use able By: Kunin (Me)
EDITED: Images of Naja added.
Last edited by Kunin on Sun Jul 20, 2008 7:36 pm; edited 2 times in total
Hey there, welcome to SWE. Your application on the whole is fine, but I do have one problem with it. It is unlikely that Beruk, although skilled in thievery, would have the capability to steal a lightsaber from a fully trained Jedi while it is on his person. If you want your character to have a lightsaber perhaps it would be more believable if it was gifted to him by the Hutt, or he purchased it on the black market? _________________
Thank you for the tip, it does make it much more believable, if you have any other hints to improve it I would love to hear them, sorry but I don’t have much experience with RP, specially online, so I might make a few idiotic mistakes along the way, I already edited the Bio, if you would like to see if it’s of your liking now I’d appreciate it, thank you and sorry for the nuisance.
It's not a nuisance at all! The fact that you're very willing to listen and take what I've said on board is quite refreshing, and for someone unfamiliar to RP your application is certainly a good effort. We all have to start somewhere after all.
Character histories can be tricky things, but most of us tend to add and expand them as we RP with the characters, get a better feel for them and develop them a little more, so don't worry about it too much. The changes you have made are fine; I like the fact that you also added in the time alone he spent trying to train, but abandoning it when it became obvious he would not be able to accomplish much alone. Many characters fall into this trap and it is hard to believably explain how they could teach themselves the way of the Force without any outside help. I also like the fact that he is an assassin; we have mostly Independent characters here so he could fit right in almost straight away.
Any questions just PM or IM me, and welcome aboard.
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